This time I'd be grateful if you went through all of my Structure of The Earth sections and tell me if I had any mistakes and/or need to add something.
Thanks for the past feedback.
:)
Crust
Mantle
Outer Core
Inner Core
Goda
12/14/2011

Crust:
-Great info and I like how you did the main point for every section
-I think you should find better picture
-I couldn't find any grammar mistake and spelling error

Mantle:
-Again great info
-I like how you find a perfect picture mantle
-It is great

Outer Core:
-Great just getting the main point and writing with your own word
-Again great picture

Inner Core:
-Smae video as outer core. I think you could change that.

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Oreo
12/14/2011

Crust
- could use more info
- great information

Mantle
- grammar
- I like how you put a great picture of the mantle

Inner core
- you have the same vid. As outer core you can change that


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Cleopatra
12/14/2011

First I just want to say I was very impressed with the clean look of your website, very organized!

Make sure all of your information is put into your own words, some parts seemed to be copied and pasted (the crust). Your information is very detailed with very few spelling, grammar or punctuation mistakes. Keep up the great work! :)

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Goddess Athena
12/14/2011

Crust:
- You dont need to add about balsalt, diabase, and gabbro because I am pretty sure not many students would understand it.
- You can add more information.
- I wasn't able to find any punctuation or grammar errors which is great!
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Mantle:
- Since you put the crust as the rocky shell you dont have to say that the mantle is a rocky shell.
- You talked about the moho in the crust section so it is not that nessesary to put it in the mantle's.
- You information is really organized!
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Outer core:
- You can add a little more information in this section.
- I wasn't able to find any errors which is great!
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Inner core:
- You had many grammar errors like ' The inner core the innermost layer of the earth.
- You added the twice in your first line.
- Since you put 'The solid inner core is the very center of the Earth', you dont need to say that it is a solid ball because you already told it in the line above.
- Over all you did an awesome job!

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Goddess Athena
12/14/2011

Sorry I forgot to add quotation marks on my inner core comment

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Joe Joltz
12/14/2011

@Athena
I did what you said and tomorrow I'm going to add either a photo gallery or a triple table of what gabbro, diabase, and balsalt are.

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Amy
12/15/2011

I liked that it was all organized which is great. You add lots of great information I was very impressed. For Crust it there was some words I did not understand like the ones at the very last part of the second sentence. Keep up the good work and add all the information.

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