Please check out my 6 Characteristics sections of my site.  Look for any grammar, spelling, things I need to add, etc.  Then inform me here.
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Crystal Structure
Hardness
Lustre
Colour
Streak
Cleavage and Fracture
Oreo
12/15/2011

Lustre
- You could use more info and you could show Moh's hardness scale
Hardness
- Great info you can use some more info
- Spelling errors (not many)
Crystle Strucsure
- Grammer good
- Spelling errors
Coulor
- Great info
- Spelling errors (not many)
Streak
- More info
- Great picture
Cleavlage and fracture
- Great pictures, not many people put 3 pictures
- Wow great info

Over all your website looks great!!! :)

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Joe Joltz
12/15/2011

@Oreo
- Why would I show Moh's scale for lustre?
- What are the spelling mistakes, I don't see any?
- What more info could I add?

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Cleopatra
12/15/2011

Fabulious job!! You have great information for every section and very relivant pictures. I can't think of anything else you need to add. I coulden't find any spelling, grammar or punctuation mistakes! Keep up the great work!! :)

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Hermonie
12/15/2011

6 CHARACTERISTICS
-good job didn't see any mistakes.
CRYSTAL STRUCTURE
-Maybe add a little more info you do not need much more.
HARDNESS
-good page maybe just a little more info you do not have much on this page.
LUSTRE
-good job no mistakes except look at this sentence
<Lustre is shows if a mineral is shiny or not.> you do not need the first is.
COLOUR
-good job
STREAK
-look at this <- The streak is the powdered form of the mineral.- When a mineral is rubbed against unglazed porcelain tile it leaves a streak.> if I were you I would hit enter so that that line is 2 lines instead of 1
CLEAVAGE AND FRACTURE
-good job
One more thing if you read your pages some would look better in paragraph form.

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Goda
12/15/2011

6 identify clues:
- Great info for every section.
- I couldn’t find any grammar mistake.
- Great pictures
- Great job

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Goddess Athena
12/15/2011

Crystal structure:
- I wasn't able to find any mistakes which is great.
- I liked how you showed the 6 different systems.
- Over all you website was great!

Hardness:
- You could add a little more information to this section.
- I wasn't able to find any grammar errors which is great!
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Lustre:
- You had a grammar error on your first line.
- I wasn't able to find any other mistakes which is great!
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Colour:
- I wasn't able to find any mistakes which is great!
- I really liked your picture because it shows different types of colour's.
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Streak:
- On your first line, after you put -, you dont need to capitalize the word after it.
- I wasn't able to find any other mistakes which is great!
- Over all you did an awesome job!

Cleavage and Fracture:
- I wasn't able to find any mistakes which is great!
- I liked how you added a picture of mica.
- Over all you did an awesome job!

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Joe Joltz
12/15/2011

@Everyone
Thanks for the great feedback I've already fixed all the mistakes.
:)

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Mr. Hong
12/15/2011

Great feedback guys! Read over what your classmates wrote and make any edits/revisions you feel are necessary.

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